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between un- and consciousness
it seems the toll is cheap;
sometimes i'm wholly dreaming
before i'm full sleep.
the train of thought i'm riding
when pillow meets with head
soon jumps the tracks for new stops
between wonder and dread.
the return trip: just as odd;
surreal melts into real.
i'm left straddling the cusp
between two worlds revealed.
17.08.12

a piece of free verse
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Sugaree33-Art Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Professional
Those days and minutes in between...
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deinktvis Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Student Writer
inderdaad!
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's interesting that you classified this as 'free verse' when it has an easily identified structure of end rhymes every other line throughout the single strophe.
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deinktvis Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Writer
well...i had no particular form in mine and it flowed freely what should i classify it
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I have no idea!!
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balthasarcraft Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Professional Artisan Crafter
I didn't know fugue had two meanings until a week ago. which turned out to be a wonderful revelation though for complicated reasons. in any case, it's funny and fantastic seeing another echo of it here.
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deinktvis Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Writer
words is good :)
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